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while you sleep, mi amor
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while you sleep, mi amor |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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carried off on this restless night, the wrath of the wind screams of loves torment, as its chimes play in a sweet paradox outside your guarded gate, cant you hear my sweet voice tonight, calling to you through your window of detachment? |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
This is really very, very good. I hear a storm coming. Ed [This message has been edited by wranx (11-23-2002 11:20 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yes, ed, but will he hear the storm? |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
He will, no doubt. But, will he listen.... Ed |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Neat poem. It's almost as if you're combining the speaker and the wind with its various screams and chimes. I loved the nice touch of calling into the window at the end. It connects this really vivid imagery to some physical event. This is definitely going into my library! "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks fracta, for getting this..........really |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Both sexy and forlorn. I like that you can hear the chimes buried below the rage of wind. |
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