Dark Poetry #3 |
I Welcome Night |
WorrosLanrete Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 45 |
Spirit be gone such lives no more Hope has left with dark to come Morrow comes yet shines no light Come Quick Death I Welcome Night -JB |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I hope the 'quick death' refers to sleep. You write in neat little vignettes. |
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WorrosLanrete Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 45 |
Thank you. My mind just seems to do that on its own. |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
I really liked this bit!!! (My mind wanders very quickly so I prefer short pieces.) Nicely written and very smooth...>; ) If homosexuality is a disease, let's all call in queer to work: "Hello. Can't work today, still queer." (If only...>; P) |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Very well written! I love the shortness yet great detail, you convey yourself well.. But I just ask that you remember this... Hope will return, hang on to it, and keep faith. Always, GG -And so it was that time stood still- |
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PoeticJustice Junior Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 44AK, USA |
I like it! That was sharp and poignant, and very truthful. However, it does kind of "irk" me so to say, about how everyone connotates night and darkness with bad things. I happen to like those two things. I'd like to see a happy poem about darkness and night(in the appropiate forum, of course). I often feel that way though. |
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WorrosLanrete Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 45 |
Darkness/night deals with sleep and emotions light/day deals with activeness and work Or so is the normal archetype |
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PoeticJustice Junior Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 44AK, USA |
Exactly! And we need to break out of vicious cycles like those that confine us so much! |
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WorrosLanrete Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 45 |
Okay, after you |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
"morrow comes yet shines no light" that is a beautifully written line.it says so much. |
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WorrosLanrete Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 45 |
Thank you |
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