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leafseranade
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since 2001-07-06
Posts 118
Wisconsin, USA

0 posted 2002-11-09 08:40 PM


it always depresses me
to see you within motionless motion
like two snakes bleeding
slithering their scars
trailing a wave pattern
of red
wondering where the pain left off
when the desert stops
and the prarie weed begins


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fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

1 posted 2002-11-09 09:02 PM


Some really vivid imagery here.  The last line seems a little odd.  Perhaps I am not familiar with the expression "prairie weed" but it does have some rather interesting connotations.  If it has something to do with drugs then you ought to be congradulated for creating a last line that shows how truly irresolvable the situation the speaker discusses here is.  If not then my interpretation is VERY much at fault

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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