»
Archives
»
Dark Poetry #3
»
Remember You
| Dark Poetry #3 |
|
Remember You |
|
|
rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA 
|
I don't even have a picture to help me remember your face and to this new group of acquaintances "You and I" never took place And now the only way I speak of you is with the tracks of my tears If I count them as they evaporate will it make up for all the lost years? I saw someone who looked like you just the other day and even though it wasn't you, I still found myself trying to say "I know you're just a memory, but please don't go away" Because if I can smile for just a little while Then maybe I'll be OK but then you just turned away... "People say I should learn some self control; but I just want to exorcise my soul" |
||
| © Copyright 2002 Jeff Osborne - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This one's kinda neat. The ending was quite powerful. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
||
|
Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Nicely written. I guess some memories I just cant get rid of and the ones I want to keep, float away with the wind. Hmmm life! Anyhow..... well done! A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness. |
||
Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Excellent heartfelt write of the ever present angst felt in the loss of a love that is hard to get over. Love your poetry. |
||
|
rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
fractal, Thank you, glad you enjoyed! The ending actually "wrote" the rest of the poem.  kisses, I can't seem to get rid of any of the memories which I know is a bad thing. Thanks for reading. Mysteria, Glad you like! I keep telling myself to write happier stuff but this seems to be my current theme! lol - Jeff |
||
|
regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Jeff, this is fantastic...don't know about others, but I have someone in mind when I read this....taking it literally, I too, have no picture, and on rare ocasion, see someone who looks like him.... and my heart stops, just a split second, but, I don't want to stay, I want to run..... So, I learned a little more about myself today, with this terrific poem and I wish you'd had posted it in Open Forum #23... for, I hardly look here.. Lucky me, today.... smiling, thanks. With warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
||
|
rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Pat, I originally intended to post this in Open but given the sad (and highly personal) nature of the poem, I decided to post it here instead. Lately, Open has been so "up" and "happy" (lol), I thought it might be inappropriate. And you hit the nail right on the head as I meant this literally. Everything you said about no pictures and meeting someone with a striking resemblance - that is exactly what happened with me. I'm glad you looked in on the "dark" side  and found me. It's great to be read but even better to be understood. Thank you.- Jeff |
||
|
Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*sigh* If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
||
|
WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Beautiful sadness. You do this well. |
||
|
dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hey there jeffrey... i only stopped in for a second...but i'm glad i did..this is a wonderful write...hey dont worry about being "darkfully written" for a while..there was someone famous (hemmingway?) who said something about, we have to first hurt like hell to be able to write anything worthwhile.. lol, sorry i dont know that one word for word..but i've found it to be true all the same.. i enjoy reading you..dark even... hugs, g "laughter is the shortest distance between two people" - victor borge |
||
|
WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
What more can I say but that is a truly amazing poem. It just hits the spot. WinterWren |
||
|
GeorgiaPaver Junior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 15Savannah, GA |
This really hits the spot, makes me think of those that have special places in my heart. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
