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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA 
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cutting the ties that bind feelings I wish I could leave behind these thoughts that occupy my mind tired of me being tired of you given up counting the days I've been a prisoner to your slavish ways you're the criminal I'm the one who pays angry at me being angry at you I used to dream of being free but I'll be damned if you'll let me be you won't stop 'til you've taken all of me sick of me being sick of you are you through with me being through with you? "People say I should learn some self control; but I just want to exorcise my soul" |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What a strong message in this poem but I guess I lived this and know the these lines all too well. Extremely well done from the point of prisoner about to be freed. |
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Succubus Member
since 2002-09-30
Posts 82Canada, Ontario |
Wow, this piece was very unique and interesting. I liked it a lot actually. I'm lookin' forward to seeing more of your work. Kisses, Succubus "We who have lived in concentration camps remember people who gave comfort to others, along with their last morsel bread..." -Victor Frankl |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Daaaa...ummm darn!?  different from your love songs and such..refreshing I guess I dunno sorry I should be in bed I have no life and I'm just tipsy..I'm such a lightweight lol...Kris If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I've asked this question to myself many times..and to someone else many times. You ask it with poetic perfection, m'dear. Love it.  "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I've asked this question to myself many times..and to someone else many times. You ask it with poetic perfection, m'dear. Love it. "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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Three Little Bears Junior Member
since 2002-10-23
Posts 13Wisconsin, U.S. |
I agree, the message here is strong. I think it's something fairly universal, but you've stated it in a refreshing way. I enjoyed this. ~Andrea~ |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
I know this feeling. The only thing that can be done, is to break the chains. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Thank you all very much; it's refreshing to see my somewhat more "dark" material strike a chord of recognition with y'all as well as the "lighter" stuff I normally post in Open. Thanks for reading  - Jeff |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
sorry re-reading sooo love it...and btw who im's me 8 in the morning lol I was sleeping  wish I could talk to you at a decent hour lolIf at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (11-07-2002 02:35 PM).] |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hmm..i've read this one several times..just back again and realizing i've not left a reply....yet...  we imprison ourselves in a place that we could easily walk out of...if we posessed no heart... you have heart jeffrey..lots of it..and thats a good thing.. you hold onto your cell key..you'll use it when its time..and then you'll find yourself free..but do not go out without your heart my friend.. hugs, g "laughter is the shortest distance between two people" - victor borge |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
We blame ourselves for so many things and then we realize it wasn't our fault to begin with. Don't know if that's quite the same message you have in your poem. But I can really relate to it. Great job. WinterWren |
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