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MiseryDivine
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)

0 posted 2001-02-14 11:58 PM

First of all, i gave this to a boy whom i like very much...n i dunno if he likes it yet...or me...hope he does....wish for me!!!

Across the land of heaven-scent
Into the halls of shimmering lavender
Stained crystal radiates
A once musty path
Now lit with the angel's most
precious stars
You were sent there
Pulled into a void
Stretched throughout time
Broken into a millon different pieces
and taped back together
Standing there, completley dazed
And oh so confuzed
You look around you
only to find miles of
frozen crystal
But out of the corners of your eyes
You see her
A lady, an angel, with wings
With eyes hopelessly devoted to you
She walks closer to you
Staring, smiling, not saying a word
Quietly, she takes your hand
and smiles
Looking up into your puzzled eyes
And if you were to take her
in your arms
her heart would not stop racing
for the way she feels about him
cant even be put to words
it's as if her world was complete
now that she had found him
Darling, can't you see?
That her world would be
If only, she wasn't dreaming
For she wakes tonite, alone
thinking of him~

MiSeryDiviNE~~

All i want in life is to be happy
It seems to me
How messed up things can be
Everytime i get ahead
I fell more dead
~KoRn~~

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

1 posted 2001-02-15 01:57 AM

Great poetry. He better like it.

I loved the ending. Keep it up.

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)

Baby G
Junior Member

since 2001-01-28

Posts 39
Australia

2 posted 2001-02-15 06:10 AM

He'll like it otherwise he ain't worth the effort! Lovely poem!

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

3 posted 2001-02-15 01:56 PM

Wonderful write, I hope that he does like it

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2001-02-15 03:45 PM

I would be in heaven to receive a poem like this...James

dragonpoe
Senior Member

since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

5 posted 2001-02-15 04:40 PM

A good write, subtly romantic in its mystical image. At least to me. I like the story-line approach, where it winds its way through in prose rather than verse, painted an image. Enjoyed.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Temptress*Moon
Member

since 2001-01-15

Posts 240
Long Island, NY

6 posted 2001-02-15 08:47 PM

It was beautiful*S*
Temptress*Moon

I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

MiseryDivine
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 114
Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh)

7 posted 2001-02-16 11:51 PM

thank you all! you're all so sweet....yeah its too bad cuz he didn't like it...

not fair..

oh well...thank you all againz!

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