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Stone Deep |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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Somewhere along the way those others touched you touched your heart- in a place I never found. (I’m sorry) I’ll try to touch it now. Immobile stretches of humility grate heavy sobbing wisps (wisps of me) to shredded puddles falling falling at your feet. How can you not see- see the hurt stone deep on me? I am transparent pale as paper how can you NOT see the hurt stone deep on me? Recalling of your gallantry (yesteryears and timid women) I feel a massive shallow festering to spread... spread so hard to callous. Crystallized drops lick soft cheeks tired eyes and screaming soul- in a way that makes you ask why? why so deep? why so cold? I tell you just this once... Taste my tears my secret fears heal the cut in silent hush and hold me close until this deep has drown to sleep Take my confession secret- (hold it tight hold it tight) and heal your loving with woman of night. **Just one of those haunting memories that come back from the beginning of a love storm...and? I had quite a rocky one to get the right storm.**  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Great work...nice being able to read your work again. Enjoyed! DeaDiAmore |
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FuzzyFrazzledFraggle Member
since 2002-09-20
Posts 155Fraggle Rock |
*does as your critique message says and strokes your ego* No seriously you have a way with words I'm sure you hear that all the time..but I never did say I would score on originality..liked it nonetheless.. Consider yourself fuzzed |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
intersting. you are all over the place here. from guilt to accusation to healing, but everything is murky. very interesting. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
hey you - caught this one right before closing my browser... glad i did. i liked your use of reptetion throughout to emphasize the contrast between words and pleas. hugs n' peace C |
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Amaranthine Member
since 2002-10-06
Posts 61ON Canada |
Strange and spectral, with a lovely rythm. I really enjoyed this. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I tell you just this once... Taste my tears my secret fears heal the cut in silent hush and hold me close until this deep has drown to sleep Take my confession secret- (hold it tight hold it tight) and heal your loving with woman of night. Poetry just doesn't get much better than this. Again, you look inside me and write me on the page. Great write! |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
There are storms, and then, there is the quiet storm. You seem to have come through both of them to find peace. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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clumsy Member
since 2002-10-10
Posts 106canada. |
now this... was dark. good job! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yes, it IS good to read of you. This is touching. Wistful wisps of deTanya. Are you back?? Hmmm? ~Ed |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Devina~ Girl ... this is really very, very good~ 'I tell you just this once... Taste my tears my secret fears heal the cut in silent hush and hold me close until this deep has drown to sleep Take my confession secret- (hold it tight hold it tight) and heal your loving with woman of night.' It's a WOWSER ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
“stone deep”, that kinda says it all for me, enjoyed the read. |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
I liked the imagery in this piece...it definitely brings back feelings that I just got over about my little predicament...sigh... Nevertheless, this was a lovely piece. I always enjoy reading your work...>; ) "Am assured,receptive,responsive women of substance. My sense of self comes not from other people but from myself? That can't be right." Bridget Jones |
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esclandre Member
since 2001-06-11
Posts 62Northern California |
Came close to crying here. This is so familiar here, that it could almost be one of my memories. "Woman of night" - I like that. Esclandre |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Sending you *all* my love as I've been SWAMPED with icky work stuffs right about now... trying my best to get back this weekend!!  and for those of you that stroked? big grins here people!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
STROKE this is cutting a little too close to the bone right now as I'm sure it would to most people at sometime in their turn on the stage I wish you would write here more often but you need to save lives fleshpoems in distress new pic more like the summer one wit dat glint dat "what you got? please..... ok well I guess I got a few minutes"glint  oh boy...... shouldhavebeensilentbri? |
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ambermize Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 157California |
Hey tanny, Just thought I would write to say I miss you, hope everything is going good for you since...YOU DONT KNOW HOW TO USE A PHONE!!!ass.... Kiss my baby for me....oh yah, by th way...I like this one alot. Might want to throw that in , this being a reply forum and all huh!! Love Always, Your sister I miss you!!!!! A heart can only truly break, once it learns to love completley. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I feel the rocks and the river. COME BACK! :moan: :bunch: :complain: |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
What the squirrel dude said.....Soon! |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
MY BEST LINES WERE: "taste my tears, my secret fears" also "heal the cut, in silent hush" those were 2 nice parts i especially loved.keep it up.bye then! ***only the wise can dance to the melody of life*** |
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