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Within The Construct
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Within The Construct |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon 
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You are trapped within the construct wedged between cememt that holds you false. Embrace of advancement progression mutation regression. Molecular change of self is so apparent in your blank stare and ghastly glow flourescent disease of skin. I want to rip this skin from you, reconstruct with passion's touch, and hot of lust, you, in form of carbon base I will, with mere hint of pain erase this from your soul and mind, Place there my image and rid you of the idol in mind you worship. WhiteRose "The first rule of poetry, write what you know." [This message has been edited by WhiteRose (10-11-2002 02:09 PM).] |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I enjoyed reading this, you paint a vividly dark picture with ease. |
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Succubus Member
since 2002-09-30
Posts 82Canada, Ontario |
I loved this piece... very abstract... totally made we use the old brain... Kisses, Succubus Better to have 10% of something than a 100% of nothing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really liked this poem. Your choice of words was amazing. It flowed really well. I enjoyed this poem to the fullest  This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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Amaranthine Member
since 2002-10-06
Posts 61ON Canada |
I have quite enjoyed the chemical allusions and metaphors you have been using... they cause your creations to take on a weird and eerie depth to me. Beautiful, and unnerving at the same time. Ecce qui tollis peccata mundi |
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