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Amaranthine
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since 2002-10-06
Posts 61
ON Canada

0 posted 2002-10-10 08:29 PM



Bemused revulsion
  like sitting
  on a half-sucked
lollipop.

That time you kissed
  the frog-
  and there was
no prince.

I know you won't
  ever read this
  so I am free
to say:

That's how I feel
  after all
  that has
happened.

© Copyright 2002 Brian Jones - All Rights Reserved
Succubus
Member
since 2002-09-30
Posts 82
Canada, Ontario
1 posted 2002-10-11 10:12 AM


I got a great sence of disapointment from this piece and hidden deep between the lines, sadness as well.
We've all been through something like that, only a little different.  This piece almost brought tears to my eyes.
Thank You for the reality check, for with the disapointment and the rage, also comes the knowledge gained...
Kisses,
Succubus

Better to have 10% of something than a 100% of nothing.

clumsy
Member
since 2002-10-10
Posts 106
canada.
2 posted 2002-10-11 10:18 AM


beautiful
bsquirrel
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-10-15 01:44 PM


Ah slow, the slow unravel
(which, strangely
means the same as
the slow ravel)

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