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Is this Better?
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Is this Better? |
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Succubus Member
since 2002-09-30
Posts 82Canada, Ontario |
Is this Better? For so long I wished and prayed for somebody to hold me at night. To call me his baby, and dry my tears if I for some reason began to cry. But Fate is twisted and played another trick on me. For the person Fate has given me offers no sence of security. True he's caring, behind closed doors. Sure he's loving between four walls. But he hurts me everyday if we dare go out into the world. He pretends we're not together, he makes me feel all alone. He pushes me away if I dare reach for his hand. He turns his head if I dare ask for a kiss. Well Fate, thanks a lot, for giving me somebody so useless, whom makes me feel cold and somewhat helpless. Well, you know what, Fate? I've had quite enough Next time I see you, I will cut you up. And as for the man who's been making me feel so bad, Don't you worry about him, he's resting peacefuly in my bed. Last night we had a talk about the way he rejects me in public, I didn't like what he had to say, so I gutted him and stuffed him with cotton. I like him much better now, I feel so secure. I know now we were meant to be together... forever more. Better to have 10% of something than a 100% of nothing. |
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Sinful_Steph Junior Member
since 2002-10-03
Posts 35Toronto, Ontario (Canada) |
OH.......I absolutely love this. I feel the same way about the man that is currently in my life. He is not affectionate at all and there are many nights I've imagined doing quite what you described. LOL....thanks for this one....it brought a smile to my face and a good giggle to my heart. "Love me little, Love me long, Is the burden of my song" - Robert Herrick |
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Succubus Member
since 2002-09-30
Posts 82Canada, Ontario |
You're very welcome hon, I'm happy I reached you, Kisses, Succubus |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
funny how so many people feel the same way about the same things, people don't know that a little affection goes such a long way, something so simpe to do, a kiss, a rose, a hug...i liked this alot...eor |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Shhh.... Calm your mind down a bit. Let the verse flow ... don't hasten yourself to pour it all out in each line. We're here. We're listening. Shhh.... It's harder, and better, to blow someone's mind with silence than volume. |
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Sikanda Member
since 2002-10-08
Posts 54 |
this is good.....seriously though the last couple of lines remind me eerily of some of Eminem's lyrics.... Really powerful Succubus. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
oooooohh yeah! liked this especially the end pillowman excellent brian |
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Amaranthine Member
since 2002-10-06
Posts 61ON Canada |
seems my sweet you hope for a perfect stasis, a union of sorts and yet, is that really what one gets from two minds sorted into one? cotten means fuzz to me, and aren't we all always picking at that damned stuff?!? |
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Succubus Member
since 2002-09-30
Posts 82Canada, Ontario |
You all gave me something to think about... Thank you all for your feedback... Kisses, Succubus |
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