Dark Poetry #3 |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I leave a hollow in myself so to hear the echoes made dropping stones -- those smooth, dead words -- into still and silent face. Unmoved surface leaving rain, shadows' swallowed shade. Glass is but a tranquil pool. Untouched. Of no place. |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Hey, shh, no be angsty, even if it's beautiful angst, k? your tongue's like poison |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
*kiss* Awright. I love you. Thanks for lovin' me back... |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Your extended metaphorical comparison between the face and a body of water is carried through this poem with extreme grace and beauty. I also detected a subtle Biblical allusion to Revelation. I don't know if you intended it but it contributes well to the poem: Glass is but a tranquil pool. Untouched. Of no place. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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nolon Junior Member
since 2002-09-25
Posts 20Louisiana,Unitedstates |
That was rather powerful. Nice choice of words. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you both. And no, I did not realize I had linked up to the Book of Revelations in this poem. Which part alludes? |
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