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Dark Poetry #3

Let Her Go

lorenlynn
Member

since 2003-01-27

Posts 203
California Beaches

0 posted 2003-02-02 05:40 PM

Let Her Go

She is holding you
From a distance.
Look at me
Capture my eyes.

I wish you would surrender,
I would handcuff you to me,
And swallowing the key
Would arrest your heart.

You have broken my law,
Kissing - you taste her lipstick
When it should be mine.
Let her go or swim in your own blood.
Cleanse the poison
That is her
Lest she should kill you.

That sadness does not
Have to be within you.
I can change that,
Look at me,
Let her go.

Wisdom comes with winters. ** Oscar Wilde.

SPIRIT
Senior Member

since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

1 posted 2003-02-02 08:44 PM

Interesting post here, I liked.

I be me BUT who does me be?

Sauteed In Sanity
Junior Member

since 2003-01-25

Posts 12
NC, USA

2 posted 2003-02-08 01:43 AM

Thank you.

I needed to hear a poem like this. Whenever I would try to write a similar poem the words just fell away. Maybe her poison still taints me.

Thank you again.

lorenlynn
Member

since 2003-01-27

Posts 203
California Beaches

3 posted 2003-02-08 11:31 PM

I appreciate your comments very much. Thank you.

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

4 posted 2003-02-09 03:28 AM

And how many of us have loved such a one?Well written,we have all held someone who still holds onto someone else.I really like the line "you have broken my law".Thank you for a nice piece that took me back to old loves.

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

5 posted 2003-02-09 09:24 PM

this was quite cool. feels like a knife edge between psychosis, obsession, and true love. ;-)

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

lorenlynn
Member

since 2003-01-27

Posts 203
California Beaches

6 posted 2003-02-09 09:38 PM

Thank you! Thank you!!

cupcake
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 116

7 posted 2003-02-12 09:44 PM

Wow!!! Interesting.

I'm a reader - not a writer.

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