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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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there is no room for sorrow in the land of grief for adding more to infinite doesn’t add much more just as adding a drop to the ocean doesn’t make it swell there is no place to go at the bottom of the hole when the more you dig the more you go inside like quicksand there’s no escape there is no rope to hang on there is no line to dry (my tear-soaked wet skin) there is no shoulder to cry there are no tears to shed and any attempt to climb back from the slippery moss of memory overgrowth leads to nowhere but back to the great depths painted in the black ashes of love's funeral pyre yet I am searching for the lighter shade of black in pitch-black surroundings like a foolish optimist who knows that even light is afraid to peek through the eclipse of the sun by a big bad moon |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
I so very impressed by this! I think this is the first poem of yours that I have read but I will certainly look up some of your other works. This is a very eloquent and well crafted poem, it is obvious that alot of work went into this, you created some brilliant imagery, Alright I will stop gushing now! Well done Anya |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very nice work...enjoyed very much. DeaDiAmore |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
"Let's have a black celebration. A black celebration. Tonight. "To celebrate the fact that we've seen the back of another black day." -Depeche Mode Loved it, Sudhir.  You play with rhythm and word and leave us with a picture of infinity, one teardrop at a time. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you very much, Anya, DeaDiAmore and Mike... Regards to all, Sudhir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"yet I am searching for the lighter shade of black" and me? I call that day! I LOVE this poem sudhir...you do write from beneath the skin. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Is it cruel to say I enjoyed reading this bit of darkness? You paint the dark side of love so well. Hope the lighter shade is visible to you soon. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Suddy this moved me 'yet I am searching for the lighter shade of black in pitch-black surroundings like a foolish optimist who knows that even light is afraid to peek through the eclipse of the sun by a big bad moon' especially that. Well done you  K |
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nolon Junior Member
since 2002-09-25
Posts 20Louisiana,Unitedstates |
Vivid,Dark,Lovely I liked the poem great job. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks a lot, O serene one, midnitesun, Kamla and nolon.... Regards, Sudhir P.S. and nolon, welcome to passions... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
slippery moss of memory overgrowth damn wished ida written...... very cool poem, sir Brian |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Brian... you just wrote it... Thanks, my friend Regards, Sudhir |
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Succubus Member
since 2002-09-30
Posts 82Canada, Ontario |
I liked this very much. But, I believe that adding a drop to the ocean could make it swell... Succubus "We who have lived in concentration camps remember people who gave comfort to others, along with their last morsel bread..." -Victor Frankl |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks a lot Succubus... for coming by ... reading and responding... much appreciated Regards, Sudhir |
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