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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
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0 posted 2002-09-17 11:45 PM




I am more
Than just some
Mere mixed up rhymes
On some computer screen
Or even in outdated journal enteries
Peel me
Like an orange
Rip off the layers
That surround my soul
I'm a pandora's box
Ready to be tasted
Ready to be experienced
Ready to suck you in
To experience
The Feelings
And the pain
That has been inflected upon me
Sink your teeth
Into the fleshy juicy memories
Orange in flavour
But bitter
Once your senses are attacked
Taste the rage
Devour my words
And take me as I am
And take me as I was
Peel me
Like an orange...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2002 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
anya
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since 2002-07-27
Posts 393
London, UK
1 posted 2002-09-18 07:49 AM


like the idea of this, some good imagery

anya

[This message has been edited by anya (09-18-2002 07:50 AM).]

arthur
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 678
england
2 posted 2002-09-18 12:15 PM


I liked this
sound idea
a person is no more than the sum of there experiances
layer on layer
I also found it sexually provacative
but perhaps that says more about me than the poem
the poem is a constant
how people re-act to it work is a variable
arthur

bsquirrel
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3 posted 2002-09-19 12:27 PM


I found a mixture of things in this, Kristen. Some of them which I'd only share in adult, if even there.

Mike

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