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Dark Poetry #3

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Neala
Member

since 1999-08-21

Posts 262
Florida, USA

0 posted 2002-09-16 10:21 PM

Every inch of my body
Crawls with sadness.
I feel it cause of you.
Everything you did
Brought me to this state.

I sit and wait
For you to free me.
I just want you to take control,
Tell me it is ok.
That you won't do these things
You did before.

Tell me my future lies with you.
Tell me you don't love her.
Tell me your coming home
Tonight.

Cause of sick of feeling
This emptyness.
I just want to lay in your arms
And know that I am all right.

The doctors on the phone,
I am scared to tell you the truth.
Cause you still may not come home
Tonight.

When you get the call a month later
You realize your to late.
Cause I am gone
You wern't there when you should have been.
You were to busy with
The wrong one that night.
If only you listened
You know why I am dead tonight.

-Neala
(Goddess of Sadness)

[This message has been edited by Neala (09-17-2002 05:36 PM).]

D edgar Grey
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)

1 posted 2002-09-16 10:25 PM

Wow....that is incredible. The emotions really run through in this piece....quite powerful. Painful yet beautiful...

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-09-17 12:49 PM

I see a big why in this, Neala,
and an answer beyond the page.

Mike

arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

3 posted 2002-09-17 12:51 PM

fine write
arthur

Neala
Member

since 1999-08-21

Posts 262
Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-09-17 05:37 PM

Thanks I am glad you liked it. It has been a while since I posted.

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