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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-09-01 11:12 PM



The door is in the center
in the ceiling
out of reach
opening
a need in me
beyond capacity
of speech.

Enclosed by panels
of the past
and future's gamble
present--tense,
I nibble at
the things I lack
grazing
in a self-made fence.

© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2002-09-01 11:18 PM


If but my past could only be seen by myself in present-tense as mere panels... I'd learn that of which you teach.
Great work here...one I'll meander through a bit longer to hope to classically condition myself to a way out!

wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
2 posted 2002-09-01 11:41 PM


"The door is in the center
in the ceiling
out of reach"

I thought we were back in the "Winchester" house for a moment.

Hey! someone is reading "the Monkey Paw" on the radio. Damn! P.R.I

~Ed

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".      

~wranx~

Purity
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Once Upon, USA
3 posted 2002-09-01 11:45 PM


Hey, Wranx... Have ya read "What Matters Most Is How Well You Walk Through The Fire"?
Lol...such a befitting posthumous work...and so appropriate to serenity blaze's excellent piece!

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2002-09-02 12:07 PM


"Enclosed by panels
of the past
and future's gamble."

Those incredibly profound words, were worth repeating! Gawd, I wish I had written them!
No truer words were ever stated!

Linda

Dragon Mistress
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since 2002-08-26
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Washington, USA.
5 posted 2002-09-02 12:43 PM


Great poem.  I liked!
-Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
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usa
6 posted 2002-09-02 01:11 PM


again with the farm animal motif?

no no
you are the
Sheperdess
climb on the backs of your sheep
to reach that hole
in the ceiling
b

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2002-09-02 01:15 PM


smiling with Gratitude, this was actually based on a recurring dream that I have...thanks for your understanding..

and winking at Brian--too bad I'm not a wicked witch--I could use a flying monkey at this point!

devina
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Cali
8 posted 2002-09-02 06:50 PM


You, my dear, have never been a nibbler...might a suggest a hunt soon on??? grins...I know. I need it too.

Drowning a bit myself, but know I always have an extra lifeline when YOU need me...one of the few I'd risk my pretty lil neck for!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



bsquirrel
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9 posted 2002-09-03 12:11 PM


You guys all rock.

Mike

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