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D edgar Grey
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)

0 posted 2002-09-01 06:20 PM

It is on the Moon¡¦s other side
Where those long past now reside
These are the souls that have since died
But self-respect they denied
Weak, feeble souls and mind
These ones were pushed and to lied
Yet they never grew strong, as changed the tide
Here there are no laws to abide
But rather sadness and pain on which relied
The water is that of tears they¡¦ve cried
And the air they breathe is of sighs long sighed
Here are the souls that have long since died
Here on the Moon¡¦s other side

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Just wrote this one, so have not edited it yet. Please give me suggestions!!! Thanks.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-09-01 07:12 PM

You go to deep faniciful places--I like your style very much. (Do you by any chance dabble with prose?)

I enjoyed the scenery, once again. Very intriguing, and got me to thinking.

Neala
Member

since 1999-08-21

Posts 262
Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-09-01 07:23 PM

I enjoyed that....I like very much. I love the style and the way it flowed.
-Neala

leafseranade
Member

since 2001-07-06

Posts 118
Wisconsin, USA

3 posted 2002-09-02 09:45 PM

Yes! This is my favorite piece of yours so far! No lie.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-09-03 11:58 AM

DeG,
You're growing,
just like the light
you wrote about.

Mike

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2002-09-03 02:10 PM

I am going to do everything I can to prevent my soul from going to the dark side of the moon. When my days are done, I want to be dancing in the light with the man in the moon! Thanks for the info----now, when I look up at the moon, I'll know what's on the other side---and it ain't a pretty place!

Linda

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

6 posted 2002-09-03 07:30 PM

Just as long as I have my chocolate chip cookies I'll be fine on the moon's other side

jk..no lovely flow you've got there, I look forward to reading more

Kristen

Dragon Mistress
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 289
Washington, USA.

7 posted 2002-09-04 09:31 AM

Very much enjoyed this! Great!
-Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

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