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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I bathe in oils and minerals in preparation for a god-- I dare not ask what he might seek-- I only pray that he will nod. I do not think I'd meet his eyes, I would fear what I might see-- I'm scared I'd see my own disgust in mirror of my hate for me. Never have I trembled so in my skin's transparency... I feel I am a virgin bride-- He sees me nude-- I can not hide. Never have I stood this bare-- I never thought that I would care I swore that I would never dare this naked vulnerability... and this just scares the hell out of me... |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Loved this. And the ending is almost perfect*  -Tanya ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this rhyme from you..  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
and such vulnerability as does not want to be seen comes through the poem..nice..nice.. hugs you..  K |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Making oneself vulnerable, is to me, an unnatual act. So practiced, am I, at keeping a safe distance, that when "snuck up on" I am always amazed. "Watch yer mudflaps" is what I say. ~Ed In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Tanya, thank you lady, love your name, it reminds me of a favored bumpersticker: "Never meddle in the affairs of dragons, for you are crunchy and good with ketchup!"  It would be a great signature for ya, heh heh. Thanks for reading. Sharon? It's sort of a "hermit speaks" poem, yes? with *winks* love you!  K--there ya are! and thank you for being so gentle with me lately--er--did you cut down on caffeine or something? ROFL....LOVE YOU TOO. wranx--I never said I liked it--shaking my head--but sometimes? ya just can't help it, yanno? We're born pretty vulnerable, and it seems to me we die that way too.  But thank for reading with hugs, and say, do ya have anything fancy written on yer mud flaps? Mud flaps always did amuse me--  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Sen, I know how you hate staring into eyes. This poem is a naked gaze. Mike |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
That prayer of nodding stalemates my abundant ability for others that would graciously accept if only I'd quit praying to such naked vulnerability Genius here. 'nuff said. Humbly your underling, P Oh yes, and Sev was totally on the mark here! [This message has been edited by Purity (09-04-2002 01:34 AM).] |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
wow, blaze, but the supposed vulnerability you claim standing there nude, bearing all, is such a surprise, that it attacks. you win, inevitably. and like the potentially far-reaching biological warfare we now fear, you touched a nerve. thanks i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you. and? I am reminded of one those Reader's Digest anecdotes, regarding a woman in a college dorm---she was accustomed to walking back from the showers in the nude--then one day? Of course, she encountered a member of the opposite sex during one of these strolls...and being of a modest sort--she wanted to hide, and the only towel she carried was on her head, wrapping her hair. So...what did she do (oh I know, you all wait breathless in anticipation--grin) she DID take the towel from her head, and? NO...she did not wrap it around her naked body, but...COVERED HER FACE. I dunno who she is? BUT I LIKE HER.  Thank you all so kindly. and? there is no "supposed" vulnerability--anything else perceived from me? is pure "bravado"... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this...fear not...James |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Your poem reminds me of many times I would dream of being in a crowd naked or something to that effect..deja vu..that's as far as my comments go :p sorry..but I really did enjoy it..disturbingly familiar.. Kristen |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very nice work... Your such a great poet. DeaDiAmore |
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A. L. Becker Member
since 2002-09-06
Posts 167San Francisco, California |
serenity blaze, i am scared with you. very powerful imagery. thank you!!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 see? oh..yeah, you DID... and yes, I STILL blush...and I hate when that happens. Truly tho, you are all too kind. I curtsy. (even if it looks awful naked) |
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