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Lisbeth
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Lisbeth |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Lisbeth greeted me at the door “I’m so glad to see you, I don’t know what to do” “About what?” “He’s killing himself again” “Again?” “You know how he’s always committing suicide.” “Ah Jeez, Lisbeth, suicide is something you only do once.” “Is he in the hospital?” “He’s on the couch.” “Still alive?” “Think so.” And there he was. Almost Rock Star, Almost famous, Almost lucky, Akimbo, on the couch. Silly suicide note Placed at the base Of a beer can shrine. Open, empty pill bottle Placed for effect. “How many?” “I Don’t know.” “Not enough, no doubt” “Is the ambulance coming?” “No”, she replied, meekly. “Are you calling his bluff, Lisbeth?” “I guess so, what should I do?” “Well, he hasn’t committed suicide because he isn’t committed to suicide. He isn’t committed to his music and he isn’t committed to you.” “I know you’re right, but, he’s always so sad.” “And he’s gonna be irate when he wakes up and sees that he isn’t in a “psych” ward” “So, whaddaya think I should DO?” “I think we should go get a drink.” ~wranx (not saying that this was right, it simply...was) In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
Lol I like your critique message  ..This poem was good and im not sure if what they did was right, but everyonr can always use a drink  ~*Azi*~ |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I guess after a while it's just a ploy poor Lisbeth almost..commited sounds familiar dialogue diamond Mr. Chinaski brian |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thank you match, for your kind reply. Thank you, Mr Poe, You may call me Henry. ~Ed |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
That gave me a nice devious smile. Thanks, wranx. er, I mean  ... no no, I mean   Mike |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
“Well, he hasn’t committed suicide because he isn’t committed to suicide. He isn’t committed to his music and he isn’t committed to you.” Excellent wording here dear wranx. I have one of these in my life too. A nuisance mostly. You did the right thing. |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
*scratches head with a grin* This was coolies. Made me think some. I like! ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very nice work Ed....Im back...I missed you. ti amo DeaDiAmore |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
PS: smoooches |
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