Dark Poetry #3 |
One Girl |
Guardurthoughts Member
since 2001-10-16
Posts 66 |
Forbidden Love, Trust Lost, Hearts Broken, One Mistake Tore A Girls World Down. Empty Stares, Lost Words, One Lie Killed Those She Loved. A Heart Filled With Shame, Pity, Pain, Remorse, And More. One Misconception Killed Her Sprit. A Forgiven Taint. A Lost Mistake. One Family’s Love Will Save Her. ~~~Gaurdurthoughts~~~ |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
*claps* I like the format and it was a good read I cant see past all the pain and torture that goes on in the places we call, |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I too liked the format--It was quite "knife-like" a sword into the ground, as the 17th ? century challenge of battle. I know you did not ask for critique, but I would hold this one, and temper and hone it...you've got an excalibur in the rough here. |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Wow. The format was awesome!! Truly was!! keep up the good work!! I hope to read more from you!! ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
You could also see in this, a straight path toward deliverance. Both in content and construct. Thanks for the read, Guardur. ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like how the ending twisted the poem from drama to life! Mike |
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