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WhiteRose
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0 posted 2002-08-13 09:14 AM



I went dancing last night
in a big dance hall
just me and the shadow
that follows behind.

I had the lights real bright
so my shadow had life
and it always kept in step
with a tendency to lead.

I pictured you there
in the shadow as we danced
your dark shape next to mine
holding me, loving me again.

Doing a waltz in the glare
of the lights so bright.

When I'd had my fill of dancing
I walked to the door
you followed me so closely.

I reached over to the switch
and with just a flick
you were gone.

WhiteRose

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desolation angel
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since 2002-08-11
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east coast
1 posted 2002-08-13 03:50 PM


I reached over to the switch
and with just a flick
you were gone.

so quick. :} good piece.

don't undress my love
you might find a mannequin:
don't undress the mannequin
you might find
my love
-bukowski

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2 posted 2002-08-14 11:11 AM


kwel i lvoe the shadows

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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3 posted 2002-08-15 04:39 PM


WhiteRose:

     A much enjoyed piece. I love the adaption of shadows and lost loves, of dancing, and bright lights. It's very original, and superbly done. Smashing ending, as well. I honestly can't see anything in it I would change. Great meter, length - pukka piece. A pleasure to read.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

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