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Dark Poetry #3

The Perpetual Pendulum

beccymelling
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 31
Birmingham, England

0 posted 2002-08-10 11:57 AM

Frantic scratching at immortality
Elusive as air to
Hot rhythmical time
Bleeding beats,
Thumping undulations,
Leaching through needle pierced
Bone, transient flesh,
Pooling, stiffened to frost
With effacement of memory.
Captivated nerve ends tingle
Their ills, jangle their junctures.
Sinuous cells snowed to
Sterility, tissue fissures
And folds.
Neurons pulsate erratically
Articulate, ambiguous,
Veiled eyes denied
Crystal visuals.
Ephemerally iridescent
Aura crackles to black
As my broken breath clouds
The window of eternity.

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

1 posted 2002-08-10 02:24 PM

I love this kind of writing.
a combination of dense imagery,
and lyrical tongue stew.
You do this well
more?
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

beccymelling
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 31
Birmingham, England

2 posted 2002-08-11 08:02 AM

Hi Brian.

Thanks for your encouraging comments. I've got a couple of pieces in pip, "Chimerical Tendencies" in dark, and "The Tide Turns" in Critical.

Thanks again, look forward to reading some of yours.

Beccy

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

3 posted 2002-08-11 07:13 PM

Good imagary

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

beccymelling
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 31
Birmingham, England

4 posted 2002-08-11 08:40 PM

Thanks Moondust - appreciated

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

5 posted 2002-08-11 09:36 PM

Beccy...this? is wonderful to see here!!!

Love your wording and the ending was PERFECT!!!

hope you're loving the sites!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

beccymelling
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 31
Birmingham, England

6 posted 2002-08-12 07:24 AM

hi devina

Thank you for your kind and welcoming comments.

I am loving this site!

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