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HeartBeats Junior Member
since 2002-08-03
Posts 16TX |
how close the distant mountain how bright the child's eyes how beautiful the sunset just before its demise when cold descends on summer she pays a chilling cost she begs, she pleads she fights, she bleeds but her innocence is lost how grey the world of color how silent is the noise how lonely the front runner once dreams are destroyed when warmth melts through the winter sun lights up her day she hopes, she feels she prays, she heals yet - the pain won't go away... |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Yeah the pains always there. But nice writing. If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I want to throw a warm hug around this poem. Said if I only could ... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
how close the distant mountain how bright the child's eyes how beautiful the sunset just before its demise when cold descends on summer she pays a chilling cost she begs, she pleads she fights, she bleeds but her innocence is lost =================================== How beautiful your poetry how heart breaking the truth ... When innocence is taken too soon so much more is lost than youth. Welcome to Passions...your gift of rhyme and expression is impressive...your poetic phrasing made this tender write. I look forward to reading more of your work. take care, jm Tell me we belong together |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
I don't know if you actually experienced this yourself but you wrote it wonderfully. Actually, there are so many more emotions that come with this that you can write a million diffrent things about it and nothing be similar... you got to the point and I like that. As most in here know this happened to me when I was 12, I wrote about it a lot but now I have kinda tried to stray away from it but I think ya'll are about to see it again cause this past weekend I had to go through the same thing again but this guy can't be punished... you know - this big [edit] that can't be touched with tons of money and land. He was 62.  I know. I'm so sorry I have given my life history... by the way... Welcome To Passions! I know you will love it here... everyone seems to be extremely close and we welcome anyone and everyone. I loved your poem... I can't wait for more... (no, I don't have a split personality... I just don't want to let it get to me like it did before... he's gonna pay in his own way) ~Rambling Jess [This message has been edited by Severn (08-07-2002 08:25 PM).] |
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