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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia 
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I Need... Somewhere to hide. No one to bother me. Peace and quiet. No responsibility. A haven, a sanctuary, as safe as your arms used to be. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A gem, Dee This said all that was needed. Better days ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I wish I could say more, wranx, but this is all that seems to be coming out. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater [This message has been edited by Dee (08-01-2002 12:29 AM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I can identify, this is one reason that I live in a shack on a riverbank. (of course, it does have running water, satellite and internet access. I'm no Thoreau) ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Need a house mate?????? Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
As usual my friend, your words say all that needs to b e said, keep writing! |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Yeah I know, like this tho its short and sweet  If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Thanks Eddie, sometimes I don't think they say enough. Moon Dust, glad you liked it. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Will a quiet house in the heart of a friend do? Tis all I can offer from way over here. |
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Dragon en Morta Junior Member
since 2002-07-31
Posts 12 |
Oh... great finish! The last line really does it for this one. Without it, just another sad story. But the directness... the power of that last line really comes across bold. Thanks for sharing. Dragon |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
hiy dear.. Well I really like it...its few words but means alot and it keep us thinking..good ending too...keep writting,, good luck.. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sounds good to me, Mark. As usual, its good to know you're there, my friend.Love Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Dragon, thanks for the comments. Glad you enjoyed. Secretlife, I'm not normally a person of few words. Glad you liked it. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I'd say all of the above, except someone to bother me constantly... lol at night.  or the day, afternoon, morning, .... Park |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I loved the simple, human ache of this piece. Said if I only could ... |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Oh for just such a place. A small set of words, but a huge ache in your heart. A great write. Love Seduces Joy From The Heart |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Park, sweetie, I'll bother ya any time! (feeling a little better)Squirrel, and ache it does. White Rose, thanks. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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