Orchid Memory (Flower in my tomb challenge)

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Dark Poetry #3

Orchid Memory (Flower in my tomb challenge)

devina
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

0 posted 2002-08-01 09:52 PM

Sorry Mike...just couldn't get that phrase together in this one...my muse no likey today I guess...grins...

Orchid Memory

Dark layers of tomb
surround my sunshine,
as I fade
into
the gray of you…

I wilt to shades
of orchid-
shades of moss,
shades…
of gone

as I weep
as you lay

as I weep
still, so still
you stay

Conjuring hope
in icy touch-
one kiss
one hand-fist
of dust

as I weep
as you lay

morning dew
gathers
to grace my eyelids

as I weep
still, so still
you stay.

Blowing wind-chilled kisses
I challenge you
to rise…
~Alas~
even I
am not so
convincing.

as I weep
as you lay
Frost bitten goodbye
on the top
of a coffin box

flowers of orchid memory-
and your tomb.

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

1 posted 2002-08-01 10:05 PM

Tanya, I think you just wrote some very good lyrics. I do hear a song here.

You people are starting to (annoy) me off.
~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.

Bukowski

[This message has been edited by wranx (08-01-2002 10:05 PM).]

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-08-01 11:38 PM

Getting wranxed up!

Devina, I love this poem. Beautifully haunted, like reading Wuthering Heights in a rainstorm (or so I imagine). Damn, I love yr writing!

Mikel

Said if I only could ...
-KB

WhileIWasGone
Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

3 posted 2002-08-02 12:31 PM

Beautiful as always...

DeaDiAmore

Samantha G Kennedy
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 131
Kent England

4 posted 2002-08-06 06:12 PM

as I weep
as you lay

morning dew
gathers
to grace my eyelids

as I weep
still, so still
you stay.
this silences me...so I can hear the feeling behind the words

a beautiful write, clearly stated and wonderfully read...aloud

i love it

Brava

Sammie

^i^

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2003-07-18 11:57 AM

This still tastes of dust

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