Moon & Stone (taste of silence Mikey challenge)

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devina
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

0 posted 2002-07-28 10:11 PM

I tasted silence
in the moon fall
alas
he was too cold
for comfort…

I slipped past the iron gates
of his determination-
and let myself
feel.
burn.
want.

I laid my claim
on wings of passion-
(ever too tame)
his guard went down,
and I had to wonder
…why…

My covet-
to purloin
cold heart
of the moon…

I sought to dwell
in forbidden estate-
(capitulation too soon)
breathing,
for sparkle warm crave-
Only to find
the key
too rough
To give into
love
at first sight

Silver warmth
ran shallow-
(stake driving home)
I tasted silence
when I kissed
a man
made of
moon & stone

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

LSM
Junior Member

since 2002-07-28

Posts 11
Oregon

1 posted 2002-07-28 10:19 PM

devina, truly painting with words, beautiful.

LSM

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-07-28 10:24 PM

THANK YOU! What a great challenge met! Awesome work!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Syneq
Junior Member

since 2002-07-28

Posts 40

3 posted 2002-07-28 10:47 PM

very romantic. an image to carry one to dreams

Disintegrated to materialize in reformed delight.

BrandeeM
Junior Member

since 2002-05-01

Posts 45

4 posted 2002-07-29 03:31 PM

oh yah!!!

you've penned a masterpiece...

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-07-29 03:40 PM

You are writing so deep, m'girlie!

"a man of moon and stone"

He DOES get around, doesn't he?

gorgeous poetry.

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

6 posted 2002-07-29 06:12 PM

LSM-thank you much for that...been pondering this idea for awhile..

Mike- so um...does that mean you like it? grins...

Syneq- you could say that...been in mine more than once!!

Brandee- too sweet you are!

serenity- love to you me sis...get kinda deep eva so often...guess you could say I'm "blindly diggin"??? *bad* I know...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

7 posted 2002-07-31 02:00 AM

although i loved (above explanation) purity's prose on challenges and ketchup, i have to say you totally outdid yourself on this self-standing poem.

My covet-
to purloin

absolutely perfect!

and "i laid my claim on wings of passions"
simply beautiful, and complexly deep.

thanks for putting this one on the table. i enjoyed!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

[This message has been edited by EveGnosis (07-31-2002 02:46 AM).]

WhileIWasGone
Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

8 posted 2002-07-31 10:07 AM

Beautiful....

DeaDiAmore

MidnightSon
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars

9 posted 2002-07-31 02:46 PM

"he was too cold
for comfort… "

"I sought to dwell
in forbidden estate-
(capitulation too soon)"

i love the turn of an old phrase....
and now you've used my fav word in a poem(capitulation)

it just has that sound to it ya know... it's a good word.

this builds and builds... i love that about you reads, but this one...
i relate to it more perhaps because of recent and escalating circumstances...hehe

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

10 posted 2002-07-31 04:04 PM

Yes, I like it.

Said if I only could ...
-KB

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