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devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

0 posted 2002-07-25 08:07 PM

Cracked tile memory

Cracked tile
stains my remember
so I tread lightly
upon reserve…
as tender flesh stings
in ardent flames
of a past-
I long to lose.

suffocation taunts willpower
(deigned helpless in mold)
control
control

I stifle the burn
(heady with scorn)
of pastimes neglect-
(you were my hobby)
a woman’s attempt at
diverting self-recklessness
to love…
You held me over the precipice
and dared me further-
cradling abandoned youth
in arms of warm curiosity…

I walked away-
you stayed.

somehow I wonder
who got smart
as the years dwindled
into my forever?

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

1 posted 2002-07-25 08:51 PM

Most incredible, devina!!! Excellent wording, perfect poetic~ness. And as for theme, I concur all too greatly!

[This message has been edited by Purity (07-25-2002 11:31 PM).]

shadowchild458
Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 117
MN,USA

2 posted 2002-07-25 11:01 PM

i usually pick a favorite part of the poems i comment on but in this one i would never dare, it's just too good i like the whole thing the best! i usually don't read your poetry but i just wondered helplessly here and couldn't stop reading...that was so good. i was speachless, but then i started talking...

life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait

AKJ

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

3 posted 2002-07-26 12:10 PM

Sorry, d'
I'll have to come back when I can concentrate.
I keep readin' the same line over n' over

g'nite

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.

Bukowski

WhileIWasGone
Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

4 posted 2002-07-26 12:13 PM

WOW I love this one devina...I can REALLY relate to this one dear friend!!!

Enjoyed much!
DeaDiAmore

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-07-28 05:13 AM

Hope yr feelin' okay. Loved th' poem. Me go sleep now.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

6 posted 2002-07-28 01:32 PM

Purity~ ah yes...the theme? don't we all sweet one! thank you...

shadowchild458~ well don't I feel blessed that you popped in!! glad to know I render speechlessness for a bit!!

wranx~ hey sweets...the attempt is what counts, no???

D~ as I know you can girl...yet another thing we have in common!!!

Mike- yah, fine I guess...just another stricken moment of stupid youth me...glad to know I've overcome now a days...but it never hurts to go back to the remember and KNOW you've learned from it....this was about my 4 year relationship from 15-19...sighs to me...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

7 posted 2002-07-29 10:01 AM

Wow! Loved the first verse.

Maybe all one can do is hope to end up with the right regrets. ~Arthur Miller

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

8 posted 2003-07-18 11:48 AM

Hmmm, still caught on that single line...

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