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brian sites
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0 posted 2002-07-21 02:16 AM


lost marble bearings
barren shimmer dripping
sweat shroud shoulders
boulder-head lost thread
unraveled glass every
stagger battered
parchment paper
bones moaning
up the dust


wait


flail spasm
blood orgasm
ruddy skin
shreds air
rakes raw
sand never
stays clawed
breath
despairing
the dust


soon


white
swollen
crack
bleeding
twitch
blasted
boil
dust


now


smacking rips
fight for a
      lung

dessicated
concentrated
moistened
on a
jackal's
tongue

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

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devina
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1 posted 2002-07-21 10:28 AM


demented? well yes...I guess you could say I've found the beauty in this...and all creatures...

Very vivid stuff mistah bri!!

take care you!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-07-21 06:49 PM


You're sick. I like it.

Dessicated Mikey

She said burn ... together.
-TON

brian sites
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3 posted 2002-07-21 10:24 PM


thanks d n' b
maybe it's from too much monty python
dunno
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

wranx
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4 posted 2002-09-21 02:27 PM


Missed this somehow.

Seems an......interesting snack.

~Ed

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".      

~wranx~

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5 posted 2002-09-22 08:46 AM


Yeah I like the way it flowed and esp. the ending

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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