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PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

0 posted 2002-07-19 07:44 PM

Touching my shoulder,
you whisper words.
But I don't hear them.

You're touching my face,
My body's so fragile.
But I don't feel it.

I look at your face,
And see the expressions you toss.
But I can't read them.

I can't tell anything about you.
You're such a mystery.
A perfect mystery...

You never talk to me about anything
I wonder if I'm your problem.
Just the other day,
I felt that I couldn't
live without you.
But now, I'm somewhat free.

But still I'm diseased,
and my mind is born again,
Into another world, thoguh.

The flashing lights on the streets,
blind my eyes as I try to see
outside your misty window.

Then I think...
"What's there to see anyway?
"There is no life,
"there is no trust,
"there is no love."

nothing matters
if there is nothing.
And nothing there is.

Then the epiphany comes
I'm not even here.
And If I am...
I shouldn't be

If we follow the invisible line of hatred, it will lead us straight to our hearts..... and pierce.

shadowchild458
Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 117
MN,USA

1 posted 2002-07-19 08:29 PM

wow that's like the second view of that one poem i wrote "my love" it's like almost the person who you take the point of view of (if it's not you) is the one i'm writing about in that poem. that's so strange. if you put the poems side by side it's very strange and unreal. i think we think alike! lol

life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait

AKJ

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

2 posted 2002-07-19 08:32 PM

it seems we're alike in more ways than one...(Which is not a bad thing)
You're getting pretty good at this whole "nice replies" thing.

I guess the poems are somewhat similar, though I love yours so much more.

Darn, my ear hurts! :\

_Sara

If we follow the invisible line of hatred, it will lead us straight to our hearts..... and pierce.

Secret Whisper
Member

since 2001-01-25

Posts 298
Through the Looking Glass

3 posted 2002-07-24 04:32 PM

Hmm, I think this is a great piece (although I usually SHUN pieces with any 'love' scenes in them). You are definetly missing a touchstone in your life that makes you feel "here" otherwise, you are going to face even more trouble down the road than you have now.

"I am not alive enough to kill myself." - Mary Ipal

Broken
Member

since 2000-03-12

Posts 271
The woods

4 posted 2002-07-25 02:48 AM

"nothing matters
if there is nothing.
And nothing there is."

Such nihilism in that stanza, loved it.
You are very talented.

Yours truly
~Broken~

Such griefs with such men well agree,
But wherefore, wherefore fall on me ?
To be beloved is all I need,
And whom I love, I love indeed.

S.T.C

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