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WindSong
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since 2002-12-23
Posts 313
Long Island, New York

0 posted 2002-12-25 07:37 PM


the darkness outside
fills the darkness within.
the blood spills through
the open hallways of life.

the darkness secures
the real sadness in
hope of death.

one shallow breath
fills the dark
in a silent tear.

one cries alone,
sobbig, catching
the breath of
darkness.

alone, i slowly
die by one dark
night, a shallow
breath ceases
the fire of
sadness.



© Copyright 2002 Kirah - All Rights Reserved
inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
1 posted 2002-12-25 11:00 PM


this hurts,
like you die, but then come back for more, to do it all over again, i hate that feeling

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
2 posted 2002-12-28 11:19 PM


oh ouch *cringes* this is a painful one, I felt it.. and it hurt.
Good write though, and keep writing.
Hope things look up for you soon.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -

D edgar Grey
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since 2002-08-21
Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)
3 posted 2002-12-28 11:44 PM


I concur: Painful. But everyone has to have a little pain, right? Very nicely written.

If homosexuality is a disease, let's all call in queer to work:  "Hello.  Can't work today, still queer." (If only...>; P)

Star T
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since 2002-07-12
Posts 182
Philadelphia, US
4 posted 2003-01-02 06:29 PM


hey windsong as always,this was a nice one but very sad.but hey!i perfectly and absolutely relate to it.and i take a moment to pray for u right now,that God will send u brighter days.

WindSong
Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313
Long Island, New York
5 posted 2003-01-02 07:04 PM


Thank you. I'm better now. But some days, it's the end of the world to me. 'Specially around the holidays and stuff. Thanks for you...reply. See ya!

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
6 posted 2003-01-17 06:41 AM


WindSong,
painful and heartwrenching and very, very good.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Ada'doLisdo'ti
Member
since 2002-12-10
Posts 123
California
7 posted 2003-01-17 07:09 PM


Painfully, sad. I hope those days pass quickly, and seldom come.

Of all I've lost; I miss my innocence  the most.

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