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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-12-17 06:03 PM


If that doesn't work,
get numb to the problem.
And if that doesn't work,
throw money at it.

Beautiful flowers
coat rustic garbage.

The higher-ups
throw a bomb at the problem.
"Bombs are easy to make,"
they say.
"Bombs are easy to break."

Sticks and stones.
Bricks and bones.

"You reap what you sow," they say.
There's not enough earth
to plant 'em all down.

Bricks and stones.
Sticks and bones.

Beautiful garbage
plants rustic flowers.

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Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2002-12-18 12:12 PM


Beautiful flowers
coat rustic garbage.
..
..
Sticks and stones.
Bricks and bones.
..
..
Bricks and stones.
Sticks and bones.
..
..
Beautiful garbage
plants rustic flowers.


I liked the wordplay and I liked the write...

Regards,
Sudhir

bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-12-19 12:11 PM


Thank you, Sudhir.
PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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3 posted 2002-12-19 09:39 PM


I agree. This was written very well. I like the slight changes here and there in the verses.
You write so well!! I'm so jealous of you!

You've combined beauty and disgust (it seems to me) and I like it! lol

Take care Mikey!

~Sara

wranx
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4 posted 2003-01-01 01:39 PM


Would this be a park hiding a dump, or vice versa?

Ed

Severn
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5 posted 2003-01-01 03:54 PM


This is so lyrical...I really like it...grim topic kinda ain't it...

grim world we live in..

K

bsquirrel
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6 posted 2003-01-02 10:44 PM


Thanks everyone. The migraine made me do it.
lorenlynn
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7 posted 2003-01-29 09:56 AM


I have migraines too, but they don't allow me to write well - I am jealous! Your writing is great.
Dragon Mistress
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8 posted 2003-02-19 01:25 AM


It's great to read a write of yours after my absence for a while.  I enjoyed this one much.  Thank you, once again.
Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

bsquirrel
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9 posted 2003-02-19 04:48 PM


I was in an erratic state when I wrote this. Those "theys," looking back on this now, seem a bit paranoid...

Thanks for readin', everyone. And glad to see you back, Tanya.

Mike

shlamingobob
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10 posted 2003-02-20 08:30 PM


it was really strangely good... like.. a ... flower and garbage... ahah .     it really was amazing though, i admire


    

Thomas119gold
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11 posted 2003-02-23 05:30 PM


hey got my attention
good write

Thomas

Midnitesun
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12 posted 2003-02-23 06:12 PM


Man, this really does sound like migraine poetry! But so well done! I've got that same affliction, migraine brain.
But for some reason, yours seems to be more creative.

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