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When I am Tired
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When I am Tired |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA 
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When I am tired of this world I just go and hide in my room And I think of all the doom I can't write I can't think Nothing is bright All I see is the dark Make the darkness disappear When I try all it does is reappear I need a helping hand From my friendship band When I am tired I am inspired Sometimes to think bad thoughts I need the answer to questions I have sought Cold hands means a warm heart |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Julie, This is an honest rendering of emotion. I liked this one far better than "Mean Dog". Of course, I may be too dense to "get" it. ~wranx "Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein. |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
alas some questions dont have answers arthur |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I really enjoyed this. Don't ever force yr rhymes though. (hand and band) Have y' tried this one with the same structure, only not rhyming? I'd bet it would be great. I liked this. She said burn ... together. |
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