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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA 
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Without a doubt I know nothing is left You ripped me apart Piece by piece Thinking of only yourself Did you think of me when you left Did you think of me when you did what you did Did you think of me at all What about the fact That you have a duty to me I am your daughter And you are what they call a father But your still not here Did you think at all Neala |
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Hopeless Romantic Junior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 27 |
I like this one,I can really feel it. I can feel the emotion. Hope to read more. |
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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA |
Thanks Matt but you know you say you want to read more you have read everything I own almost. -Neala |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Did you think of me when you left Did you think of me when you did what you did Did you think of me at all If this is as real as it seems to be, I think that your father should read it. I've not read any of your other work, I think I will enjoy it. |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
father /daughter so sad it didnt work for you arthur |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Neala hon...I can relate to this, I really can..  K |
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kinson Member
since 2002-05-13
Posts 66somewhere between here and there |
remember that you have people in your life who love you very much, who wont ever leave you, even if they dont like your taste in music  |
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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA |
Matt, wranx, arthur, and Severn I am glad you guys liked it. Chris I believe you left. -Neala [This message has been edited by Neala (06-11-2002 03:03 PM).] |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
they are good questions that i too have asked. an emotional write. i hope the writing helps. "The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite." |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Father's day can be a really tought time of the year when a father has not been all we feel he should have been.. as we mature we usually fine.. whatever happened had nothing to do with us as children but the parents had their own problems and past pains. Writing is good therapy, it can save our sanity. Good writing, thanks for posting. |
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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA |
Thanks everyone for replying it means a lot. -neala |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Very tender write, I'm sorry your dad was not what he was supposed to be for you, I think that it was truely a loss for him as well, because he obviously has a very talented daughter. Hugs. |
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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA |
Gemini thanks that is really nice to here on such a subject thanks. -Neala |
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blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
so sorry for you ~hugs~ but great poem pple can relate to |
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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA |
Thanks..glad you enjoyed. -Neala |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A beautifully angry longing and absence.... I really enjoyed this. She said burn ... together. |
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