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Where Did We Lose?
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Where Did We Lose? |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Sitting shotgun, awaiting arrival to a place we all hate to go The loss unbearable as it is, continues as those we've not, for some strange reason, had a reason to see in years hug us with tears and those we've never met, seem endless as they enter, but for the same as I Sitting shotgun, the beauty of the Earth rarely having a reason to stop and notice makes me weep even more...the question starts to sink in Losing employ, debts perpetuate to a place we all hate to be The struggles hopeless as they are, refuse as we try, for some strange reason, to find a reason, any reason, to overcome fears continue to blast and bombard the weak concept as they pile, and we, what, hope? Continue to try? Losing employ, the glory of the Heart rarely getting the chance to matter and tug opens emotions I try to hide...the question begs its notice Reclusing to observation, just wondering to a place that we all hate to think The headlines bleak as they are, manipulate as we fail, for some strange reason, to fight against the programming and control for complication is what turns the world as all forget...the reason...the meaning Reclusing to observation, I sink, reminescing remove and restrain all bad...the question I give full attention. I deviate, now, from the scheme of past lines Where did we lose it all? Glimpses we are given daily, in small kind acts and in smiles invoked by animals being lively, sunset being more grand than noticed before, children doing the unexpected...not the norm But, sadly, tomorrow dictates worldly necessities that we created so as not to remember... So, tonite, I thought I'd meander a bit but don't worry, the world will try me to forget Yet, here and now, which cannot be raped, pilaged, stolen, borrowed, or destroyed...the question was re-presented to myself... and to you. Where did we lose? |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
"to a place we all hate"...the thing that most made me slam into a stop! deep, and thought provoking. i know you are saying that the beauty of it all is in the simplest of things God created, and yet we taint it with dark colors of this sad, messed up world. i did take time to think on this one. where did we lose it, purity, and how do we regain it while still here? love conquers time and everything except reality knocking on your door telling you that you're evicted because you didn't pay rent, or telling you that your power is being cut off, or telling you that your brother died. where did we lose it? better to say, why do we fail to keep it? i love this, and you for sharing your center of emotions. i know that you've suffered a deep loss, and yet, maybe we can all learn from the beauty you speak out of this all. good luck to you. thanks for another awesome piece of your heart. [This message has been edited by EveGnosis (04-09-2002 03:25 AM).] |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Your words offer welcome respite. Again, I thank you. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Dang! I don't know why more people haven't replied to this one. This is a really good poem. Definitely very philosophical in nature. I like the way you mentioned in passing, in the final stanza, that you were deviating from your previous form. That made the poem even more effective in conveying its message about an often fragmented and disjointed inconsistant society. Awesome job! "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
WOW  ! Words can't even begin to explain what an incredible poem that was! GREAT JOB  !! There should be more replies on this!  LadyPeach  |
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