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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
This little broken heart, This shattered little life, Nothing is ok, Nothing is alright, No place for happiness, No longer can she spread her wings to fly, This girl is so unhappy, And she often wonders why, Why should she be living? Why should she be breathing? Why should she still wake up every day? All the questions take her back to WHY? Alone, Scared, Madness, Unbeared, The screaming, The fights, Struggling to make it out alright, The pain, The fate, No love, All hate, The cursing, The demands, One man for himself, No helping hands, No place to hide, No place to run, The screaming still isn't over, It has only just begun, Pushed, Shoved, Her only hope, Is up above, God take her away, Let her be in your arms, Let her out of the cold, Let her be warm, In the comfort of your presence, Please make this fighting go away, Why are they fighting, Why is it everyday? She begs to be out of the darkness, Pull her into the light, She is scared, She is trembling, She is lost in the darkness of the night, When she finally thought she had escaped, The fighting began again, And it was too late, The madness and the hurt, Drove her to her fate, As she lays down, She begins to cry, She realizes, Our world contains too much hate. |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Unfortunately our world does contain too much hate. All, I can offer is that if every human tried to show kindness instead of hate, maybe we could eradicate at least 50% of it cause of course there will be those who don't know how to show kindness over hate. Dawn |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Yes, you painted the world as it is but love can flourish in our hearts in spite of other people and their fights. Allow it to grow and feel it in your soul! |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
Thank you all for the feedback, it is much appreciated. LP |
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angel_face_35 New Member
since 2002-01-03
Posts 5 |
Wow. That really describes how I'm feeling. great poem. ~*~Kellie~*~ |
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Keith Morgan Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 114Md |
very powerful and emotional piece. i can feel the pain and confusion in every line. nice expression of feelings come to life. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Oh my gosh. I think this might be one of the best pieces I've ever read. So dark, and so riveting. I was sucked into it immedietly. I became the girl in a sense. I could feel her pain. Wow. I enjoyed this piece temendously. Superbly done. Again, wow. I offer my prayers and support. Sincerely, Titus Smile, Jesus loves you. :) |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow, Some tough questions here--hope you can find some answers soon!! Great work!!  ELMO |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
WOW. Very powerfully written. Keep up the good work. "What makes letting go hard isn't losing what you had, but losing the dream of what could have been." |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
thanks to you all for the feedback! LadyP |
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See me? Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 93UK |
Brilliant post Life is about change,sometimes its painful,sometimes its beautiful,sometimes its both. |
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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida |
thats good..thats how I feel most of my life.. "Water Over Matter" |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
Thank you all for the replies! LP |
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