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Dark Poetry #3

I'm Dead

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

0 posted 2002-03-16 03:13 AM

i stopped, today
to take a look
at nothing but an old tree
my mother always smiles at
when in full bloom
it looked dead to me
had an ominous gloom
for i just didn't look
long enough to see

i wandered, today
through places quite known
as the everydays of scenery to me
i never smile at
when in full view
they looked dead to me
had a non-impressive hue
for i just didn't wander
long enough to see

i wondered, today
about life away from all
forget success; forget wants of me
i've tried so hard
without focusing on you
I looked dead to me
had the wrong list of to-do's
for i just didn't wonder
long enough to see you

i looked, today
at everything that you are
and have so galantly been for all
that never understand
you looked so alive to me
that I stopped, today, and realized
that I finally looked
long enough to see

what's most important to me.
and so i'm dead
no more stopping, wandering, wondering
or looking
for i'm alive now with you and staying
long enough to see

it all...

[This message has been edited by EveGnosis (03-16-2002 03:15 AM).]

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

1 posted 2002-03-16 03:21 AM

purity...you are missed. where are your words of poetic beauty? this one is for you, and for my mom.

Baroni
Member

since 2001-10-14

Posts 94
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2002-03-16 12:11 PM

Well done! excellent poetry. The imagery is stark and depressing, This really sets the mood.

Due to circumstances beyond your control, you are master of your fate and captain of your soul.
- The Angry Bard

LadyPeach1
Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 282

3 posted 2002-03-17 01:47 PM

This was simply beautiful.

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

4 posted 2002-03-19 10:15 AM

Your Mom would be proud. A beautiful poem, and I think I'll stay around "long enough to see it all" EveGnosis!

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