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The walk |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. 
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Beneath a canopy of the forest deep A shifting haze of a summer morn I walk because I can not sleep Solf rain on dead leaves forlorn Huey helo nearby.I feel it's blades You can feel them before you hear My mind drifts away into inky shades For just a moment I feel the "old fear" Will it always be there to haunt my mind Will it grow dimmer as I grow in my age I walk out of the shadows into the sunshine To let my life begin on a fresh new page [This message has been edited by paladin (02-27-2002 11:05 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I walk out of the shadows into the sunshine To let my life begin on a new page ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Although rather dark Bob, I do appreciate the work in this and love the uplifting ending. I do not read in Dark Passions that often, but since you post here...now I will return.  Well done, hugs, Nancy. ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Your poem was excellent and the cadence perfect, I thoroughly enjoyed your work. ~* Imagination is more important than knowledge *~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paladin~ 'Beneath a canopy of the forest deep A shifting haze of a summer morn I walk because I can not sleep Solf rain on dead leaves forlorn' You've written it ... and it's the first-step toward releasing the 'old fear' and the second-step into the 'sunshine'~ Very well done, sir~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Nice poem. I liked the dark ambience, as well as the changing scenes. The transition from the first few lines to the helicopter seemed a bit confusing, but that's just me talking. Overall, a great read. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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IntoTheFlames Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 92Va, USA |
Our minds do wonder quite often don't they? I think you did a great job of describing it:"My mind drifts away into inky shades". Great write! ~*Summer*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hopefully it will grow dimmer with each fresh page...James |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
The sunshine beacons...turn a fresh new page...inspired write, Robert.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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