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Dark Poetry #3

Aftermath

Broken
Member

since 2000-03-12

Posts 271
The woods

0 posted 2001-12-08 09:22 AM

AFTERMATH

The well of pain,
inexhaustible
It flows through me,
like needles

Cruel sanity,
is picking
Harsh mockery,
all around

There's no escape,
from this existence

Angel,
take me away
far...

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2001-12-08 02:30 PM

I have felt like this many times...then I go and take a warm vanilla soak and forget what it was to make me feel that way.

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

2 posted 2001-12-09 07:10 PM

Sad but very effectively done. I like it!

I am many.

Dark Poet
Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 99
North Carolina, USA

3 posted 2001-12-10 04:42 AM

Short and with all the punch needed. All in all a well done work in my eyes. The simplest of things in a piece sometimes stick out the most and grab the reader. You kept it simple and to the point. All the reader can do is grab onto it and ride the "aftermath" of your poem in reflection.

Well done man,
James

Good cannot exist without evil. Darkness I embrace.

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

4 posted 2001-12-10 09:18 AM

Must agree with James here, simple yet so very well said. At times I find the shortest of works the most mind grabbing and here you have done it well.

Until...ali {alibaster}

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001

"Sleep those little slices of death, how I loathe them." Edgar Allan

lone_poet707
Member

since 2001-11-17

Posts 70
black hole named Aylmer

5 posted 2001-12-10 10:00 PM

very well written..iv'e felt like this many times. I love how it gets straight to the point.
-Joe

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