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alibaster
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since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

0 posted 2001-12-05 12:25 PM

Butterflies in Mouth.

Tell me did you ride upon the nearest shooting star
drifting here from afar
wearing your pain like a proud scar.
Did you finally dance upon the moon
light-footed while feeding the sun with a spoon
then returning far too soon?

Tell me did you hold mother earth's hand,
painting violet pictures in her warm sand
then run naked catching her precious tears
of raining fears
upon your tongue
pretending you loved while destiny sung?

Tell me did you dream of the animals speaking
in tongues while you rode the rainbow freely,
sliding down from rose colored sky
pretending you could fly
with broken wings to forbidden places
claiming them as your own private sanctified spaces?

Tell me did you see,
I was there begging you to hold me
as you wrote your emotions down
watching the words fall helplessly to the ground.
Did you miss me in the outer atmosphere?
My trembling fingers traced your travels from here
and you held beautiful butterflies in mouth.

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001

"Sleep those little slices of death, how I loathe them." Edgar Allan

Broken
Member

since 2000-03-12

Posts 271
The woods

1 posted 2001-12-08 09:47 AM

I'd like to say that to my girlfriend.
Great poem, long..

Yours truly
~Broken~

Base not your joy upon the deeds of others,
for what is given can be taken away. -Peter Steele

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

2 posted 2001-12-08 02:13 PM

sounds so much like the Train song, "Drops of Jupiter", i actually thought for a moment, I was reading their lyrics!

geezzzzzz

wow!!!!

were you listening to this when you wrote this piece?

quote:

Drops of Jupiter by Train

Now that she's back in the atmosphere
With drops of Jupiter in her hair, hey, hey
She acts like summer and walks like rain
Reminds me that there's time to change, hey, hey
Since the return from her stay on the moon
She listens like spring and she talks like June, hey, hey

Tell me did you sail across the sun
Did you make it to the Milky Way to see the lights all faded
And that heaven is overrated

Tell me, did you fall for a shooting star
One without a permanent scar
And did you miss me while you were looking at yourself out there

Now that she's back from that soul vacation
Tracing her way through the constellation, hey, hey
She checks out Mozart while she does tae-bo
Reminds me that there's time to grow, hey, hey

Now that she's back in the atmosphere
I'm afraid that she might think of me as plain ol' Jane
Told a story about a man who is too afraid to fly so he never did land

Tell me did the wind sweep you off your feet
Did you finally get the chance to dance along the light of day
And head back to the Milky Way
And tell me, did Venus blow your mind
Was it everything you wanted to find
And did you miss me while you were looking for yourself out there

Can you imagine no love, pride, deep-fried chicken
Your best friend always sticking up for you even when I know you're wrong
Can you imagine no first dance, freeze dried romance five-hour phone conversation
The best soy latte that you ever had . . . and me

Tell me did the wind sweep you off your feet
Did you finally get the chance to dance along the light of day
And head back toward the Milky Way

just wondering.... sure sounds like it inspired you!

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

3 posted 2001-12-08 09:05 PM

Thank you both for the kind comments, glad that you enjoyed.

...Actually doreen, I started out about 2 weeks ago with just a part of a sentence in my head..."butterflies in mouth" and it took me two weeks to come up with the rest to go with it...but you know I do have the Train song and the only lines that are actually all that similar is the "shooting star" and "tell me" parts...though I do like the song much and maybe in the back of my mind, yes, maybe it did inspire the rest of the poem.

Until...ali

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001

"Sleep those little slices of death, how I loathe them." Edgar Allan

[This message has been edited by alibaster (edited 12-08-2001).]

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