Dark Poetry #3 |
Wasteland |
Dark Poet Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 99North Carolina, USA |
Wasteland Copyright 2001 Written by James Edward Shields Play for me sorrowed tune Smoke rising in dance Dust in air of that what once was Silence halts in this place Cold face stare laced rapid heartbeat Ruin crawled about a hollow land Flames torn eating the dirt And the skies can only cry We are born into this world alone, and we will die alone. It is what we do between those times that matters. This is where we leave our mark. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very interesting..i enjoyed this a lot ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Poetof-the-night Junior Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 13 |
Great poem, very flowing in meaning to me. "Don't think you can know you can" |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well i enjoyed this read alot. reminds me of one of my poems called "escaping" with the brief flickers of words that trap people into the meaning of it all. love it and keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Dark Poet Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 99North Carolina, USA |
I would like to take the time to thank everyone who responded to this poem with their comments. Thanks, James We are born into this world alone, and we will die alone. It is what we do between those times that matters. This is where we leave our mark. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Whoa! This was quite well-written. I especially liked your second stanza, " Cold face stare laced rapid heartbeat Ruin crawled about a hollow land Flames torn eating the dirt And the skies can only cry " "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Dark Poet Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 99North Carolina, USA |
Thank you, it was heavily inspired. We are born into this world alone, and we will die alone. It is what we do between those times that matters. This is where we leave our mark. |
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