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ThyWizard Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 56Chambersburg, PA, USA |
Fading barn on a sad gray hill, Weeps in silence as all is still. Cowering sun and bold faced clouds, Hidden ‘neath mystic shrouds. The barns red paint corrodes away, The barn dies more each passing day. The doors swing open and all is seen, The other side a faded green. A dismal place of sickly heat, Raw wrists in shackles, hot coals on feet. More to this barn that just its whole, A gateway to the darkest soul. The evil within’s been there since birth, Uncontrolled it shakes the earth. Fingers from the sky reaching for the ground, THUNDER! LIGHTENING! FRIGHTENING sound. Epitome of all that’s lost, Why oh God this costly cost?! < !signature--> " How can i feel if i can't breathe..." - Godsmack [This message has been edited by ThyWizard (edited 01-23-2001).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ThyWizard, I liked this poem, although I'm not sure where you were going with the shackles and hot coals! I loved the image of the barn bleeding into the earth. Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Great Expressions, great poem! Mags No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Very vivid! Adds so much power to this piece. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I know the feeling. Good work. |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
wow. very very very very vivid. i can close my eyes and poof theres a barn. keep writing and keep it real  peace jesse True beauty is often hidden in darkness... |
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