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Jonas
Senior Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 796
Oregon

0 posted 2001-10-24 10:47 AM

screaming
pain of loneliness
sears every nerve
turning day into purgatory
night into hell
where demons dance
a diabolical step
while assaulting my mind
with disjointed dreams
then awakening
in a sweat soaked bed
to find comfort
in the blue glow
of a television screen

5/18/00

And I lie here in bed all alone- I can't mend
And I fear tomorrow will be okay
- Staind

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2001-10-24 07:46 PM

OOOOOH! well hello there fellow insomniac!

...loved the frustration of this piece- it really shone through. i think you captured what its like to have sleepless nights for vampires everywhere! i thought that this poem was very well done jonas, thanks for sharing this...keep writing, poet...

"......",said the wise mute.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

2 posted 2001-10-24 07:48 PM

...just a little note...I LOVE THAT SONG!!...*ahem* ..

, love the live version with fred too..

"......",said the wise mute.

JT
Member

since 2001-09-28

Posts 69
Arkansas, USA

3 posted 2001-10-24 10:51 PM

Man, I've read some sad stuff here, but this is painful it's so sad. I hope that writing this had a real cathartic effect on you and made you feel better. Rock on.

JT

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

4 posted 2001-10-25 08:33 AM

Coming from the apitimy of a true insomniac.....you have written this so very well that it's chilling. Thank you for a grand morning read with my coffee...
Until...ali {alibaster}

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001

"Sleep those little slices of death, how I loathe them." Edgar Allan

Jonas
Senior Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 796
Oregon

5 posted 2001-10-25 11:56 AM

Thank you all

Insomnia is a pain, but you get used to it. It's the causes of insomnia that get to me most.

And I lie here in bed all alone- I can't mend
And I fear tomorrow will be okay
- Staind

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

6 posted 2001-10-28 06:55 PM

Jonas, I really enjoy reading your work. I have just a bit of a suggestion... I think you don't need "then" next to "awakening". But either way, it's an excellent poem!

*smiles*
~Tier

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

7 posted 2001-10-28 09:47 PM

That's it Jonas. It was all caused by that horror show on t.v. seeping into your dreams...uh, you were sleeping, dreaming, weren't you??

Well done my friend.

jwesley

Jonas
Senior Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 796
Oregon

8 posted 2001-10-29 12:26 PM

Tiersdin - you are right about the word usage.thanks for catching that

jwesley - Can't remember, but I think I wrote this during relationship troubles. Thanks for reading

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