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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
beaten down, mind and all told too much, and wronged by what was said changed, yes, that's to be expected arranged by only the dtested dismayed of course, but that's what is displayed on course, but that's what's his Play, so we seem Stay so he can gleam wrong with me????? wrong with what??? just where is it that I give anymore listening I change what I can't store explain ? it's like asking a blind man what the color green looks like it's all relative anyways change is within the numb, but exchange has only just begun J.L Koehler |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
it's like asking a blind man what the color green looks like I thought that was an extremely interesting line but overall the poem was extremely interesting within itself...the topic was unique and it really had me locked into it..i enjoyed it a lot...wonderful job |
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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
Coming from a great writer such as yourself, that is definately a great complimenton a piece that almost blew my head off trying to come out. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Interesting write. Shows a mind in a state of confusion, in a whirl. Been there many times, hope you figure it all out. I can't say I ever did. Enjoyed your poem If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Amongst all chaos, there will be a resolution in time. Yes, you may feel obliterated now but tomorrow you may feel something totally different. Great expression, carolinadreams. All writing comes |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
But from the ashes of obliteration something beautiful may grow..... Wonderful write hon!! Isis *The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~ |
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