Dark Poetry #3 |
Mirror Mirror |
G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Mirror mirror On the wall Tell me why It is I fall For the ones Who love me not All the while My soul will rot Mirror mirror Tell me true What can I try What shall I do To keep my soul From growing cold I’m all used up My story’s told Mirror mirror Help me please I beg you now Upon my knees You see I just Can’t take no more My heart is bleeding On the floor Mirror mirror Hear my thoughts My spirit’s trapped In darker spots Of this world Which I call hell My love is wasted Can’t you tell Mirror mirror This can’t be My life is filled With misery Please hear the thoughts That I have said Please dear mirror Make me dead G. A. Webb Regret not that which you have done, |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow--That was great--though kinda harsh--but i have felt it before--& u put it into words so beautifully-- LOVE ELMO |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
the poem was excellent all except the last line, should read please dear mirror make me live. Believe in yourself!! |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Mirror Mirror On the wall Help me fly To Greg's call To hold his hand Helping him see I am his friend Throughout eternity Very nice write here Mr. Webb. You know your work puts me in *ahhhhh*!!!! Now if ya could only see what else you do to me. Oops Any ways, LOVE this one! Mags |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
*sighs* If only you knew how much I can relate to such intense emotions. This is very well expressed and the rhyme and flow is perfect. I hope that your pain will pass~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Oh dear you are down aren't you? Nothing is so bad as to wish death even if only a fleeting thought... the only thing perhaps - an incurable disease, otherwise no. Hon, chin up, have faith, your day in the sun will come... you have to believe though, or it won't happen.. *hugs* Isis *The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~ |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Thank you all for your comments. I'm ok, just under alot of stress and very tierd. Thanks again. G Regret not that which you have done, |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
this poem reminds me of one of mine im crying im dying im screaming inside you should check it out |
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