Dark Poetry #3 |
Angry Days And Misting Focus |
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Your ears and mind are deaf to my unwillingness to be your innocent toy. Perhaps the night has been too much in my favor, Now that the stains don't come from the corners of my eyes anymore. And the slow cinch of insides creeps up like an ominious tightening fist to slake the thirst of pain again. Dream of me if you must, but I am on the other side of the gate Swinging the key Do you see it? I took it away but it has a magic of its own. Now I'm seeing you standing on my side of the gate again, Swinging that key in a maddening hypnotic rhythm making anger quiver from the corner of my soul. You're not mocking me with it, but there you are Swinging it. Why are you doing that? I'm getting Dizzy Please stop making me love you while I need to hate you. Please Stop I don't want to hate you and I don't need to love you. |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow, I got the chills when I read this... so many women fell this way.... Love and hate, can sometimes be the same.. first you must have one or you can't have the other.....great post! Julie :) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I don't want to hate you and I don't need to love you." Exactly...James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
quote: then what??? what else is there??? this is the question that needs to be answered. . . -------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely written... I agree that the ending leaves us wondering if not that..what? |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Thanks for your responses everyone. I have but one question. Why MUST that question be answered? Why couldn't the reader ponder that on their own? Sorry...I suppose one of my "poetic babies" are my endings to what I write. I try to leave them thinking or wondering. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
one doesn't have to answer at all temptress... and I agree that is nice to leave the reader with something to ponder... I guess in my particular case, I was looking for indifference... which I happen to think is truly the opposite of love... and wanted the poem to end..with just that..and in a way..a final closing... great the way it reads... and perhaps I am a bit too literal today... looking for absolutes in a place where absolutes do not exist... |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
In my opinion you don't need to answer anything! You've made your statement that is where it stands at present. It's hard when you love them even though every fibre of your being tells you it's wrong.. Great stuff hon Isis *The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~ |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow! I'm speechless, but I know exactly what u mean--great one LOVE ELMO |
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