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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
: As I sit and wait : I ask my self why : Why do I wait : When for days I get nothing : I feel I am being avoided : I sit and wait for you : Just to come into view : But I don’t see you for days : But I see where you have been on : At a time when you : Know damn well I won’t be on : Then I find the others know you better : So I sit and wait : And ask myself why : Why do I wait : I think I know what is happening : So now I will go : I don’t know it is the wait : That got to me : Or just the damn silence : I don’t know how much more : That I can take : Of this sitting and waiting : I think I’ll just leave : Maybe then you will be : Happy once again Question....How dark can we get and what kind of subject are taboo in this forum? |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow, I totally feel this. I love it. Good write... As far as getting to dark or taboo... no violence upon others, no cursing.. no explicit sex... stuff along those lines. For that tho, you may goto the Adult forum if you're 18 or over. Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
For me passive women are madening...don't know if they are passive because their feelings are dead or if they are passive because they don't care...James |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
You expressed yourself well here. The wording could be a litle better; like choose diffrent words that mean the same thing.  ~Jess |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
The longing and sadness can be felt quite clearly in your words... enjoyed reading... ~Tier |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hi alan...enjoy your work. If you have any questions about what is acceptable check the guidelines. Profanity is not permitted, nor is any reference to violence to yourself or others. If you have further questions, please e mail me or one of the other moderators. Sorry for being tardy, but unfortunately, my life has taken a "dark" turn of late, and I'm just now trying to catch up. But thanks for asking! |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I would like to thank everyone for their kind comments and the help. serenity..it has been awhile. Nice to see you are still here. Thank you for your input. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ah Alan...I hear ya...but things happen you know? |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
aww this is sad. i know how you feel. and maye some of the words could be changed, to only make it flow bettter, but it is good the way it is now too "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"-NIN |
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