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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Drizzle in the night, Rain falling in mists so slight, Hiding all the starlight, Except for in your eyes. Drizzles carry on, The moon could well be gone, Carried still within our song, And the melody still flies. Raindrops falling down, A crescent moon in your frown, Eyes cast toward the ground, As words reach to you; Sorry starry night, Shines without its light, Burning hiding from sight, There’s nothing we can do. Then she goes, Wondering off into gray, In the night, From his sight, Knowing words he could not say While near her, Feeling fear As it binds his heart tightly, Vital part, Aching heart, Emotions burning brightly. There she goes, Leaving him with just the gray. Gloom |
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Lady Ollyne Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 337East Coast |
thy words, whether in darkness, daylight or times of gray...always share thy depth of thought... Lady Ollyne "O, learn to read what silent love hath writ: To hear with eyes belongs to love's fine wit"...Shakespeare |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Even in the drizzle there is beauty, you can see it, wish more people could. Beautiful hon.. Isis *The heart of education is the education of the heart...* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This really is a lovely poem...with such an ache of melancholy...listening to Moby's 'Inside' while reading it really suits the poem lol... great job  K |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Lady Ollyne, Glad you liked my rhyme, As for the depth, mine is a deep darkness. Thank you, Isis, I try to see everything I look at, I am pleased you liked my poem. Thank you, Severn Your words are kind. Gloom |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Lovely words indeed. Seems most ppl do not bother to see the beauty as you do... Until...ali< !signature--> "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. [This message has been edited by a-alibaster (edited 01-10-2001).] |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, a-alibaster, I am pleased you liked my view and my words, You honor me with your kind words. Gloom |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Very nice. Well chosen words make beautiful imagery here, Gloom. "And the melody still flies. Raindrops falling down, A crescent moon in your frown, Eyes cast toward the ground," Joy |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was amazing Gloom. Very very good. I liked it a lot.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Joy 14, I am pleased you liked it. Thank you, Dopey_Dope, I am pleased that you liked it. Gloom |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
NICE. |
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howpeculiar Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 56 |
Aching, sweet, and turning... thank you, Gloom. This touched a lighted finger to the melancholy romanticist quality I claim to sheathe. Be Well. |
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Zyell Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 121USA |
the darkness is something we need to emphasize the beauty, you do this so well! *S* Z Life is an adventure to be experienced |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
*Is speechless* |
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