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Raven Skye Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 112.In a House. 
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Especially to Me I wish upon a star That maybe you could see How much you really mean Especially to me. It wasn't long ago When I thought you were the one I don't think you remember But we sure had lots of fun. And now we've grown apart Thrown away the lock & key I'll guess you'll never know Maybe it isn't meant to be. But if you change your mind I'll be here to stay & If you look into your heart I'm never too far away. So I'll wish upon that star And maybe you will see How special you really are Especially to me. ---ehh hey guys, not my best work, i know...feedback good/bad are both accepted...thanks *×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×* "Can't explain the way that I feel. You are the love I never found." -Cold |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This was really sweet. I understand that feeling. Just kind of empty without that person. Good luck. jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well it's not your best work, it's a bit different. Hope you didn't squeeze it out or anything.  Either way, it's alright. And it's definitely as good as it is going to get, so I can't offer much feedback.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought it was ok, not as good as your others, but still a nice read. Hope to see more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Raven, nicely written with a pretty good flow to it. As I haven't really read much of your work, I can't really compare it to the others. Well done all the same.  ~AF~ "To alcohol! The cause of - and solution to - all of life's problems!" Homer Simpson |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This was written in simple form, but I love what it says. Probably one of my best reads today so far. Thanks for the share "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
I really liked this poem. Keep writing.  )always, *~~angel bee~~* |
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