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the clear thought |
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litle_krazy_poet Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 71 |
if you can understand what i mean in this poem please tell me any way you can because i have showed this to a lot of people and none of them have gotten what the message is and where it came from the clear thought that is what i seek so that i be like others just meager and bleak all the people lying to get their way everything is nothing so i take it and stay go this way and that deception like at rat one day thinking mowing the lawn i think why all emotions are gone here but gone bitter sweet just sitting in this could and heat while hiding it to all others trying to make sense i'm a different to all of them they wonder why i'm tense that is that here and there all around but nowhere bad in good captivity in freedom stupid ness in intelligence silence while i hum coming but going both off and on just remember i'm here but gone i write poems all the time and i post them for all of you. some times i write 4or 5 a day and then sometimes just one and i post the one that i like |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Sorry, it's the A.M. and I am going to have a tough time deciphering this one. Well you say a lot of things like "hot and cold," combining two opposites. Like nothing is different, even from its opposite. And then you mention that you are different from everyone else. But if even hot and cold are the same, how can you really be different from everyone else? Or maybe you are saying that you are so different, so unique, that even hot is more similar to cold? Well that's what I figured anyways. It was a nice poem, by the way. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Ok...I'm gonna take a shot at this...it's like you are standing there, looking at your life...looking at you not being there, living it the way everyone else wants you to be, you are different, but no one really gives, it's like...aslong as you give give give, they are fine, but as soon as you ask for something in return, you hear you didn't give enough...and then you get drained...but still no one really cares...and I'm starting to think I am missing the whole thing... Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well I can see that you praise Duality within the poem. Duality: On/off here/gone stupidity/intellect everything/nothing. So yea.....then the title is CLEAR THOUGHT. My guess is this: The clear thought you are talking about is the fact that you are looking at it from the flip sides. meaning you see it ALL......all angles and thus making it a clear thought rather than one tracked. Uhhhhhhhhhh or maybe this poem is about a spoon.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
After reading the other replies, now I don't know what to even think.......yes, a little helpwould definitely be appreciated "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Ohhh.. this reminded me of someone I know...Me!! Well, this poem made me think a bit... anyway I am still lost( within myself that is) so I will depart saying Good job and hope everything good comes your way. The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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