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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
I look deep into your mysterious green eyes This isn’t the first time I’ve looked Yet it is the most memorable This time I see everything that we’ve been through deep in your eyes Our life when we were children It’s prom night and here we are once again wanting to escape We can’t handle the noise and crowd and so… We run That is how we always escaped before We ran through our forest It is beautiful There, we see everything in a different light, Especially ourselves We feel a certain indescribable energy to be with one another In the woods we love each other for who we are Without the judgment of the people around As we run, I cannot think Everything is a blur We pass our overgrown field And also the swing we made when we were little I remember we were so proud Now it is old and covered with moss Finally we reach our destination where everything unfolds into a world of enchantment We climb up to our tree house and sit in silence We are alone at last with the warm night air around us I see you in the pale moonlight But I don’t just see you, I see us in those deep green eyes. ~btw this is something i just made up when i was listening to some music...its not from life experiences~ [This message has been edited by ethel lahootie (edited 03-08-2001).] |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful and deeply romantic! Welcome To Passions, I hope you enjoy your stay here! Keep up the wonderful writing! *Krista Knutson* "Can't run fast enough Can't hide I can't fly I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
dang reading through this im like thinking..whoa that is like the most awesome bond you two have..then iread the end that its not real lol *Sigh* one can only dream  Great job on this..and welcome to passions *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well this piece is outstanding. I loved the imagery, the sweet story... I pictured it all happening. Makes me jealous.  "I remember we were so proud now it is old and covered with moss" Now THIS line hit me. Wonderful symbolism. Welcome to Passions in Poetry. I definitely can't wait to see more of you. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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shortilove_03 Junior Member
since 2001-02-15
Posts 20Arkansas, United States |
The poem was wonderful. It has great romantic quality. Welcome to Passions I really want to see more of you. =) Shelia |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
hey everyone...thanks so much for replying...i have to admit i was a little nervous to see the replies..  but it turned out ok! thanks again for replying and thanks for the welcome! ~eTHEL~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey you! You don't know me but if you come around here you will!! *evil laugh* No need to be afriad little sprout, I don't bite  Anyhow, wonderful poem! I surely do hope to see more of you around here. I also hope to see you reply. Oh and as a favor to a friend you should go check out "TEEN EXPLORER" they have cake over there.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS Great way to start out here. I loved your poem. I think I'm going to like you Keep posting.*Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
WOW girl!!  That was GOOD!!! Nice first post, I c u figured it out aye? Keep 'em up Jobethel!   Bel |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
hey yall dopey_dope: hey man dont worry i wont b scared too bad  hope 2 c more of u 2~thanks for replying yall!~ bel: hey chicka thanks for replying!!!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Glad you've decided to join our family here in Passions for Poetry. Hope you enjoy you stay. You narrated you poem really well you are gonna fit right in thanks for the read keep sharing hope to see more soon "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
This was a great first post!! WELCOME TO THE FAMILY!!! *sorry it I am a bit late I have been gone for a while* The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
hahaha no prob angel in flight! thanks for replying! have fun~ethel~ |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great poem, really good work, I'd like to see more of your work. |
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Wicced_Witch Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 110Clarksville, TN, USA |
Wow..I really love it. Great job. Welcome to Passion. I'll be look forward to more of your work. Stephanie |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Welcome to Passions!Great job on this poem, I hope you keep posting here for a long long long long time "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" "Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it." BothUnknown |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
thanks u guys for welcoming me! yall have made me feel right at home!! thanks again!  "i remember running through the wet grass falling a step behind both of us never tiring desperatly wanting" ~better than ezra...desperatly wanting |
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